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Tess came to the attention of The Mistress at The Spa when she was just a skinny waif. Now she is wondering if she could somehow get out of her room and join the fun in the pool on such a lovely day. (It would be nice to find someone to illustrate this series of stories.)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 3.75
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.50
PeterBE
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A really wonderfully fun vignette! I hope you will continue this and flesh it out more (pun intended!).
You should post this on deviantART and solicit illustrators there!
Red
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Promising! I agree with the others, needs more detail, and would benefit from greater length.
But give the guy an A+++ for the realism of these oversize monsters - love the accuracy and sensuality of what the weight and bulk would necessarily involve. Can't wait for next chapter.
deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great start. Just a bit short and not much actual BE going on, just the fact that they were already huge.
Ryver8
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story!! I am looking forward to more, hopefully.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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