It's a world where any body modification is normal. IF you want BE, you've got it. Looks, intelligence, they're for sale. Question is, would everybody want it?
WARNING - while this does contain BE, and some PE, etc., it does try to tell a story. It's pretty long, so now you know.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.20
- Characters: 4.20
- Technical: 4.60
Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This was very well written. Shame about the lack of muscle growth on the man -- you had a hint in there, but a male turning into a complete stud also hits a lot of buttons.
The Almighty Popo
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
It was an interesting story. I really only have one problem, and her name is Chloe. Were you trying to make her completely unlikable? If I were in his position, I would have waited for her to apologize at the very least before taking her back. She is a double standard-having bitch. Gender issues are a touchy subject with me, and girls like that piss me the fuck off. If anything, Ethan was being a pussy. He should have stood up to her from the beginning.
I'm gonna stop right there before I start ranting for 8 pages. Still, your writing continues to impress me. Keep it up.
Kowalski
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent. My main criticism is either it felt a little rushed, or maybe I just wish the story continued and delivered a little more. The scene at the beginning in the theater with the other couple in the corner getting it on, and the main characters watching and wondering "what will it be like" was probably the best part. Seemed like that part of the story never quite got its pay off. This could make a great series.
sp1kegrw
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
a very good story would of been better with more be and pe discription s in it
yalldonome
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Wait! there's no mm! honest!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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