The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Two Halves Make A Whole
A little something I wrote for a group on Deviantart.  It features a D&D setting about a race of sexy humanoids called Mammorians who are all about huge breasts.  let me know what you think, I love feedback!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great first part, really enjoyed the descriptions and strong characterization. Hope there's more coming.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

not much description of the growth but an overall good read. I felt the ending was rushed, but concede that ending stories of any genre is one of the most difficult of tasks. I think it's a good sequel candidate.

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