A tentacle beast is loose in a women's college
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.25
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Please write part 2. Been waiting with anticipation!
SMAP
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Pretty good work overall; it's definitely short, but you manage to fit a lot into the couple of pages and don't waste space on extraneous details. There's some minor word-choice issues that detracted from it a bit in my opinion (bubbles?), but no outstanding technical errors.
Definitely could stand to see some more of your work- your pacing and description are very good. Longer would, of course, be better, but don't take that as a press to make you go that route; there's certainly something to be said for succinctness.
PeterBE
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really like your style. The story telling is good. A longer piece with more details in the BE will be much appreciated. Looking forward to more!
AFarmBoy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Decent, not great. Far from bad but not good enough to get above okay. It's short even for a part one for my taste but I would like to see the whole story once it's done. And this is probably something that will only bug me, but you have Sandra grabbed by the tentacles, including one going into her mouth, carried to the other girls, than with no mention of being freed is able to use her mouth, only to be seized again. Keep at is cause I would like to read more.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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