Stacie steals from a Mafia boss and gets caught. He deals with betrayal a little differently than most.
Like my other stories its erotica with toys, anal, bondage, domination, and growing boobs. Please rate and comment if you want me to write more.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.71
- BE: 4.57
- Characters: 4.29
- Technical: 4.71
BB47
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great Job! For some reason, I have a tough time writing stories in the S&M vein.. however, I sure enjoy reading it from time to time. Good pacing, yummy eroticism and fantastic character/scenario development as the situation continued to spiral out of control for the main character.
You left it open ended.. and hopefully you'll not get "writers block" trying to figure out where to take it from here. You should really finish it somehow.
Call me crazy, but I would love to see a twist where the antagonist is somehow caught by his own drugs. His character is very careful.. so he's probably not prone to mistakes.. but perhaps he doesn't realize how permeable his own skin is to the high dose of chemical in her system. After he cuts her down from the rack he's taking advantage of her again.. but next thing he knows, he's being adversely affected. My personal preference would be for him to become hyper-sexualized just like her.. major PE and libido increases. As we all know, she is one really tough cookie.. so her ability to resist the drug surpasses his and she is able to slowly gain control over their sexual escapade until she snatches the bottle off of him and forces Him to take more. Back and forth it goes until she gains the upper hand and finally figures out a way to escape OR... until she figures out a way to "take over" his operation and become the NEW boss. After all, she started this story as a thief.. why not end it that way.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, perfect amount of BE, great descriptions and believable characters.
banditkings
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
HomoNovus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Fantastic story! Your stories are really something. More please!
beachball boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
You have to tell US more! Wow what a great BE story!!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It's a great short read. The BE is a little hard to follow and relatively fast near the end but I loved it all the same.
anony1234
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great story in premise but left a little to be desired in the actual description of BE, the pacing seemed a little too fast and the quality of the BE suffered from this. That being said more enjoyable than your previous stories( for me anyways).
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
