Someone said there was a decent story hiding inside this one. I hope no one minds if I tried to coax it out.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.75
- BE: 3.75
- Characters: 3.25
- Technical: 2.75
Mr. Slate
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
@Elbee It's not his name. He hi-jacked it from The Flintstones.
Elbee
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
This is not fixing it...this is hi-jacking someone else's work and pasting your name on it. Not an improvement over the original. Suggestion...: The original author rewrite and go a chapter at a time...building each installment on an event in their lives...and not necessarily in chronological order.
Grayface
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Holy crap I loved it. Just the kind of breast worship I love. Just wish it was continued.
Granma
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I loved the story, so I hope my grading isn't too harsh. I like the new texturized version. But I have one 'major complain. To be honest i expected the last part of the story to continue, but it just ends the same way of the first version.
Still I love the new depth and detail
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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