The Overflowing Bra

What a mess.  Also bewildered by some other reviews that are rating this as "the best" with a 5 stars in multiple categories.  Were they reading a different story, were they related to the author, or is this the first written work they've read?

Excellent story. Though I don't care for the LOL's and OMG's , your chracter (you) was anything BUT a bimbo. She is a phenomenal women; one that should be honored. I loved it.

By the way you are scum, Jake.

I agree with eggs that this is a fine story. No obvious spelling or grammar issues. Using "LOL" once or twice does not make the story into a teenybopper txtext msg.  Grow up, and if you naysayers don't have anything nice to say, well, you know the rest.  There's plenty of other stuff on the net deserving of your scorn, but this story ain't it.

Poorly written, poor story in general. I don't know who could read this and give the BE a "5" rating compared to other stories here. I'm also never a fan of reading about guys' penises. It seems like this was not written to contribute to the community but to get an ex upset? Take it somewhere else.

Very, very poorly written. The whole thing reads like a bad Facebook post.

 I really liked your voice and the story.  Write more!  Go bigger!

Good on yer, Jessie. Don't listen to these schmucks who don't understand POV (Point of View) characterization.
Keep at it.

This is a fine enough BE story, very sexy and enjoyable.  It's completely inappropriate to give a minimum rating without even reading the story, and those critics are full of shit and their ratings removed.  It's commendable that a young female writer, having written her first story, would contribute to this mostly-male site.  Okay, so maybe it's not Shakespeare, but if this site is dropping off, maybe it's because the critics are driving away any hopeful new contributors.

I think the other posters so far are being a little harsh.  The story is clearly written in the main character's voice.  It has LOLs and the large amount of exclamation points, but there are very few technical mistakes.  I enjoyed the story.  While it could use some more description on the BE, I would put it in the top 50% of stories I have read on this site.

1 for technical quality. Reads like the description. Excessive use of capitals for emphasis and "LOL!!" when the author writes a joke into the story. If you can get past that though, it's got decent BE. I read. I fapped. I came. It reads like a revenge story though, so if your name is Jacob (Jake) and you recently broke up with Jessica (Jessie), I suggest skipping this one unless you want more reasons to get upset over it. To the author, Jessica, don't write the way you speak. If you can't, try to find an editor. There are some good ideas in this story but they are lost in the lack of technical ability put into this piece, which is why I gave high ratings for the other categories. If you think you can do better, please do. I would be very interested to see what you come up with. On another topic, if this is how you break up with someone, you're not putting yourself in a good light for whoever comes along next. Revenge, especially after a break up, isn't all it's cracked up to be.

This is very quick, full of errors, and most importantly a very slutty main character. While I did enjoy the source of her expansion, having her suck off so many guys, specifically all in the same room too, is not a very sexy read for me. You also never explain how big she got, just the final size of her nipples and areola, which had she really gotten those parts of her to that size I'm not sure how she managed to stand, much less do anything else.

I agree with sperdle.

If you can't even write a single coherent sentence in the description, I'm not going to waste my time downloading your story.