This is a corollary to my upcoming story, The Wet T Shirt Contest.
Vanessa uses the Flesh Alteration Kit to dominate her friend Danny and show him a good time. Its a lap dance with a devious twist!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.14
- BE: 3.29
- Characters: 3.57
- Technical: 4.29
Anneth
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Dell... love your mini album. We are in the process of trniyg to sell our home right now but when we get done I want to learn how to make vids like you do... you are so talented with how you embellished that book as well... thanks for sharing!
etherealvision
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I had fun reading this one. I really hope to see the next one soon :D
Lexi Kiss
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
the weirdness makes up for the lack of breasts growing. this story is hot. it'd be even hotter if Vanessa doesn't give him his cock back, attaches it to herself and makes it bigger.
alcoholicGrammarian
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Maybe it's just not my style? The description of how the kit worked squicked me pretty bad, and it clearly was more important than the actual expansion in your story.
SleetyRain
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I can't wait to see how the following story sees this extend.
Chris
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Cant wait to read all of this
ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The BE was kind of a second hand to the wacky transformation kit instead. It's an enjoyable read, and far better than most thing posted here. The kit is pretty weird though, certainly not normal. I remember reading the story where that came about in the first place though.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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