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Our plucky heroes, the lovely (and luscious) Princess Cassiopeia and her ever-loyal chauffeur, Fiora Tailwind are really in a fix this time! While investigating a mysterious asteroid rumored to be cursed by the local space Gypsies, the two adventurers stumble upon something even more sinister: that steel-hearted scoundrel, Baron Cyberface! Now he and his all female army of personal bodyguards are holding our heroes captive. Will the princess and her friend escape Cyberface's sinister DDeathtrap, or will they be the next victims of... The Curse of the Mysterious Asteroid?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.57
- BE: 4.43
- Characters: 4.57
- Technical: 4.86
Grim Jack
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Longbow is a good writer. It is clear he he loves to write and takes his craft seriously. Well done dude!
toonfan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Good story! Now, get back to writing more Medicine Show ;-)
Seriously, it's nice to see you branching out. Keep up the good work.
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This is the first story on this site that has made me laugh. Not as sexy as most of the stories I like, but still quite enjoyable. Two misspellings that I noticed, but not worth taking a point off for. The writing was clever. The characters' solutions to problems made sense, and didn't feel like a deus ex machina. It was surprisingly not predictable. Well done.
Omnitrixie
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This was so silly, I was laughing too much to enjoy the ridiculous fetish moments.
Fourshot
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'm reminded of Buckaroo Bansai for some reason. Fun read. I look forward to the sequel!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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