(NOTE - I MIXED UP THE STORIES IN THE UPLOAD - SORRY! If the website owner could be please correct this -thank-you!
Original story: "I MUST INCREASE MY BUST"
Seque: "NOW, I MUST INCREASE MY BUST"
I wrote this story (by hand!) about 20 years ago. I then typed it and posted it online around 1996 but it has since become difficult to find.
Synopsis: Sequel - horny doctor gives large implants to his loving nurse.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.50
- BE: 2.50
- Characters: 2.50
- Technical: 2.00
BEGuy
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
Numerous typos and poor plot development. Should have proofread it sometime in the last 17 or so years
deus
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I'm not sure if there is something wrong with the file, or if this just really needs to be proofread. There are sentences that just end, sometimes in the middle of words. I like the concept of the story, but beyond the obvious technical issues, it would be nice if you filled out the story with a little more description. It feels like it races along too quickly.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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