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A short, first person account, strictly dialogue, of a woman being transformed into a milky cow-girl. This was written as a script for and used by someone on Reddit.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.80
- BE: 2.80
- Characters: 2.00
- Technical: 3.60
greas
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
what subreddit was this on
bitches dawn
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Felt good. Loved the rapid growth.
OAO
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
This isn't bad per se, but it still feels really lacking. I get that it's a script, and I've read similar things before, but it just feels incomplete.
Kanodin
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Good start, but try broadening your writing repertoire. You need to expand on this story, and go beyond the one-sided conversation by using more modes of writing. Description probably needs to go beyond what a person is saying. And how does everything in the story make the person feel?
conversion2009
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
a poor attempt really, bad stucture, unable to follow dialogue
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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