[BE] | BI-GIRL | Flat BE : Practically STORYLESS | 13 Page story | Story follows a girl of smaller stature as she acts out her perversions with a little help | FIRST COOPERATION | SMALL VERY BUSTY GIRL included as is my signature character type | RTF ONLY | Special thanks to Trixielle Lunare for great edits and detailing scenes were necessary as well as updating grammar everywhere | Please enjoy!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 4.00
Sonic1991
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I'm happy that you found a good editor. English can be a brutal second language to learn, but I'm sure that if you keep writing you'll master it soon enough.
I really enjoyed this short story. Please keep up the good work, both of you.
OAO
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Some minor grammar issues and two sentences that I had to read twice, but overall, your editor has helped substantially. I enjoyed this one. I personally would prefer more gradual growth that is described as it is happening, but that's just a personal preference. I look forward to your next cooperation. Perhaps a continuation of this story where Ida "helps" her new roommate?
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
There certainly isn't any plot or substance to it, but for a quick romp it was highly enjoyable. I look forward to any future writings, the Green Goop seems to be a recurring theme.
Notgoodwithnames
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Not bad. Minor grammar issues but overall pretty enjoyable. Glad you found a good editor. Keep it up. :-)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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