Alex lets James and Dean in on some new fun. Then his cousin Faye shows up in a surprise visit! Some surprises are bound to be revealed.
This one gets a little bit weirder. However it's all in good fun!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.25
- Technical: 4.25
Chaos-Master
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I agree with Bobking11, you should take your time writing, so you can REALLY blow our socks off.
Please keep up the amazing work! I will be keeping an eye out for any of your future writings.
A happy customer :)
Chaos-Master
Bobking11
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
It is obvious you are rushing to get these stories out, and it detracts from the quality. I would prefer more time between better releases than less time between worst releases.
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good. You could take more time with the descriptions. It feels like you are rushing. Don't be afraid to take your time, and to break up sentences. Also, there are some minor typos and grammar/punctuation issues that are distracting. Based on the writing overall, I think you should be able to find them if you take more time proofreading. Thanks for sharing!
crazysly
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Liked everything. I would get rid of some of the extra spaces between everything. I would like a little more detail on the Breast Expansion and if you can go further with the belly expansion in the next chapters that would be awesome. :) great writing and can't wait for more,
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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