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The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
Siren Song, Part 7 (World of Altaerna, 1185)
Part 7 of 7 – “No Other Way”. The final part of Barbara’s long journey is here, but how much further can she go now that she’s too chest-heavy by far? Answers! Revelations! Mermaids! ... no, seriously, contrary to what you may have feared, here they are now. -- 15,000 words in glorious multi-platform-compatible HTML, with previous parts included for your convenience. Comments welcome but by now I’m just happy if people can be bothered to read it ;-)
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Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I borrowed the secnod in the series, The Girl Who Played with Fire, from the Lodi Whittier Library, and enjoyed it even more than the Dragon Tattoo. It's mostly because Lisbeth Salander is even more central to the story, and the author slyly gives her even more to do and reveals much more about her history and character. Be forewarned that as in the first novel, the author gets you hooked before he throws in the scenes of torture and brutalization that can be disturbing to read.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Amazing, very beautiful language, much better than most I've read here. I will anxiously await the epilogue!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very few comments for such an excellent story - It's taken a long time to get here but well done

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Well done Paul, yet another crackin' yarn under your belt. as KTC said it would be nice to have that epilogue you mentioned with Barbara finalising her size and then perhaps her first rendezvous with Dave as her feedness. Perhaps they could find some way for Dave to join her permanently perhaps as head of her personal guard maybe. What can I say, every time I finish one of your stories I find myself poised for the next. Please keep up the really good work.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

God damn tease... great story :-). I'll be pleasantly surprised when your next story with Dave continues. I wouldn't mind a short of Barbara's final transformation either.

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