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The Overflowing Bra

Unauthorized Expansion
Everyone is abuzz about a new cosmetic treatment called Voluptimax, a process which uses nanobots to reshape the subject's body and give them the figure they've always desired.
When Cynthia Hawthorne shows up at a fancy dinner party to show off her new curves (body by Voluptimax, of course) she ends up showing off much more of them than she ever wanted to!
Is Cynthia's humiliating experience merely the result of a defective batch of nanobots, or the first sign of something more sinister?
Action, adventure, interplanetary conspiracy! It all starts here in the first volume of UNAUTHORIZED EXPANSION!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Don't know if last guy is reading same story. Whole first segment is BE, and description says this is "first part" so not sure why he was expecting a complete story. I liked it chapter ending felt kind of abrupt though.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

Formatting is cramped.
The story does not flow well.
Hard to really find the BE aspects amongst the muck.
Story is incomplete.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is nice but i would like to see more about Medicine show.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Stop having a writers block? Hopefully you can continue Medicine Show too, but I'll take anything from you.

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