Sammie Richards is back in another two FAT chapters! She finally meets her lover, uncovers why she got her 3 wishes even though there is many kind people in the world. Sammie also decides to have take-out for dinner ... I wonder how that's going to go ...
(Chapters 1-4 with some changes in 1&2. Hope you guys with da food fetishes like it. :)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.75
- Technical: 4.50
lexi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Guy Incognito
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
You had a few errors in the story, but certainly nothing to distract the reader. I just recommend reading it out loud when you're editing.
SERIOUSLY enjoyed this story, can't wait for more!
Mority
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I cant wait to read more of this
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Once again your characters and quality were excellent. I found myself well engrossed in the story. I also noticed that you put a lot more effort into your BE, which I really appreciate. The one thing that distracted me during your description of the BE was that your cup sizes were way off--at one point you describe Jessica's boobs as "basketball-sized", but then later as DD, which is probably more along the lines of baseball-sized or slightly larger, but probably half as big as basketballs. Other than that one nitpick, this was excellent and I continue to look forward to your work!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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