Sammie Richards' life was pretty ordinary - nothing really exciting happened. That was until she decided to help an old woman, Eliza, with her car one day. She didn't know that her life's excitement would become bigger ... way bigger.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.57
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.29
- Technical: 4.57
Straywolf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This is really interesting but I would like to see the characters developed more. It seems like the beginning of a really good story
LurVeCurve
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A bit too short, it was so good though. you can make the next chapter great by adding more character depth and a member of the opposite sex with mutual interests. you made it really hard not to give 5's across the board.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I loved your story, especially the kinky wishes that the main character made. BE was good, but I felt it could be a bit more descriptive (but I was feeling generous). I think you need to elaborate more onto the characters (my opinion). Your technical was excellent! Can't wait for the next chapter!
journey's end
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
For me personally, its not exactly my forte. But dont be discouraged, like others have said, for those folks with food fetishes this would be absolute gold. For all the technical, grammer, plot, character detail and such i thought you did a very good job.
best of luck on your future writings.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I absolutely love the plot to this story, and my only complaint is that I want more! I wish there were more detail to the BE. I'll be looking forward to your next installment.
Zeke
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Truly fantastic work. Food fetishes aren't normally my thing, but this story really conveyed the eroticism of it beautifully. Can't wait to see the next chapter!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I liked it. I feel like you could improve on it even further which is why I didn't rate you as 5's across the board but I didn't really have any problems with it.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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