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A quick story about a woman who is changed from a smart but plain college student into a lactating, submissive pet. My first free work in a long time and, given the ending, possibly the first of more quickies.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.60
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 4.60
- Technical: 4.20
Knightwolf1875
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Would love to see another like this.
Lucky
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Thank you for this! Such a treat. You delivered a lot of tasty entertainment in not many words at all. Really impressed! Please, more!
JJM75
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
The formatting is pretty bad. You need to separate your paragraphs more. Proof reading needs to be done to correct a few tense and pronoun issues.
The story itself is too short, and deserves a lot more of the actual action. It's 90% build up, 5% action, and 5% closure.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Trying to be a little bit more subjective to the actual flavor of the story compared to personal tastes. While I personally dislike intelligence loss, it was a good short story and I'd love to see more from you. If there was any writing errors or grammatical flaws I can't remember, which likely means they were inconsistent and few and far between.
stucky
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I love how her mind changes along with her clothing. Wonderful story.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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