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The Overflowing Bra

Piercing the Heavens and Filling the Clouds: Drill 1
Tegen Toppa Gurren Lagann: A series of events happen that change both the history and events of the series. Growth comes in the end of the entry more will be put in and other pairings might be possible if suggested... Enjoy
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Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Slow down, take a deep breath when writing.

Read some of the highly-rated stories here, get a feel for what sort of styles people like. As it is, your stories, while containing a kernel of a good idea, are hampered by grammatical issues and annoying stylistic quirks.

I think, in this case, it'd be helpful for you not to think of matching the rhythms of anime when writing. The written word has different beats, and what works on the screen does not necessarily work on the page.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

All copies of this story are written by me I just have a ton of ids and I don't intend to change them because that's how I am...

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

You know if you are going to copy and paste someone elses work and not even give them any credit can you atleast keep the origional formatting?

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