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The Overflowing Bra

Del Ken
Expecting the Cost of Betrayal
A witch discovers she is married to a demon and moves to take advantage of him, but is what is the cost of betraying a demon?

Warning: contains bursting.
Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I liked the idea of the story wonderfully, but I would have liked to seen the main character escape the violent ending somehow.

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Hardly any BE. More of a violent pregnancy story.

Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

This wasn't bad per se, but felt sort of incomplete. By the end it felt like a small part of a much larger, much more interesting story.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Without a doubt one of the best stories I've encountered on the net.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of the very best. Ever. Dark, moody, angry, and beautiful. Believable characters, great writing, plot progression befitting a story twice its length...

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