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Terry Anderson is a high school graduate with a little problem. Miniscule, in fact. But, when he finds some snake oil cream in his grandfather's old traveling trunk, he exchanges his tiny problem for a big one.
Now a freshman in college, Terry and his cream are cleaving chaos and insanity wherever they go.
The student body will never be the same...
Co-authored with Fafhrd. Originally posted on LPSG.org
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.30
- BE: 2.90
- Characters: 4.80
- Technical: 4.60
Nick
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome story! I loved it and read it 3 Times! When is the sequel coming? I'm dying to see it!
The Almighty Popo
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow. I'm not even turned on. I'm just enthralled in the story. Have you ever thought about being a writer? Seriously, you shouldn't be writing on websites like this. You should be writing books. You have amazing skill.
Bobby
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Right when the BE was going to get good the story ends! Make a sequel!
boris
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Very enjoyable story, but I'm a big fan of MPG, so there's undoubtedly going to be a lot of flack. The fact that the BE is only now picking up is pretty lamentable, as well. Definitely needs to be edited, as a lot of the dialog is superfluous, and an awful lot of things are described in detail unnecessarily. It is finally missing that chunk where something happens to Greg, and there's a lot of grammar and spelling errors.
Looking forward to more.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
silentreaders comment is how I feel. The story has BE, but it takes such a long time to get there that I can't rate it based on the actual BE, which was good in its own right. However the writing is fantastic, even if PE as the focus is fairly foreign to me I look forward to any further posts.
Lovedrop
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, good character development, 104 is missing the entire party scene. TBC
Ray
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
smartz118
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Like the story, but it seems after part 104 there is something missing in the story, something about a break in and stealing and what not. You may want to check that.
GeoffK
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Like Silentreader said, this is mostly a PE story From the lpsg.org web site (large penis support group) and that is still the best place to grab new installments--in fact one is promised very soon. The story is just expanding (no pun) into BE now, so you need to read towards the end to get it. But that looks like the direction that the story is now moving in a big way and it is very well done so far. Overall, this is a novel-length story that draws you in and goes surprisingly quickly. The writing is excellent overall and the storyline is sexy and hot. If your looking for a quickee story or dislike PE, than you may not like it, but I think it's great. Wow, two awesome stories in a row. A very good week!
silentreader
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
GASP! You have added this here? Excellent.
I've always enjoyed reading this despite it not actually being done and suspense will probably kill me one day.
The BE in your story and Fafhrd's is only a recent addition and while what we have seen so far has been amazing, the ratio of Breast Expansion to story length is too great to get a high grading for quality alone.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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