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Of which Keith buys some fake IDs, a new home, and a strip club, naming it, "The Cat's Meow"; the number of cat women in his pride practically double; and Katie finally tells Jamie about her relationship with Keith. (This one ended up becoming twice as long as the others. Also, I may have overdid it with the number of cat women additions this chapter. Enjoy!)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.40
- Characters: 4.40
- Technical: 4.60
dooga
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Overall, this addition to your series is excellent; however, there are a few parts where his/her and some names are confusing at first.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Freakin amazing. One of the best.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'm enjoying the story and the new additions to the cast. Hoping to read further chapters.
@Paul Cullen: Some areas list the over-bust and cup-size in preference to the under-bust and cup-size. I think it may be partly due to stuff like lad's mags where it is sexier seeing 90cm and D-cup rather than 72.5cm and D-cup. Out of personal preference, I also think the larger numbers from seeing the over-bust elicit a visceral feeling that I don't think I would receive from just the under-bust and cup-size. The same goes for metric measurements over imperial measurements. For me, over 40" is less sexy than over 100cm.
Paul Cullen
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I'm a big fan of this series. Keith definitely seems to be losing control of his harem (not that he was ever much in charge). I have one criticism of the writing. I think you are misrepresenting the BE in your story.
You describe some of your characters with sizes like 44F, or that they grow to be 40H. From your descriptions this doesn't seem right. The letter refers to the actual size of the breast proportional to the rib cage, and the number refers to size of the rib cage. A woman with a 44 size rib cage would be very large or very overweight. Therefore, if you want a woman with a slim body with a growing bust she might go from a 34C to a 34F. 34C to 40F would mean she got much bigger in terms of her whole chest.
The jaguar part and Emily's arrival was great. Can't wait for more!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
The formatting is a little bit weird, but some obvious improvements and in general the story is a fun BE to read. Looking forward to the rest :-).
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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