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Of which Keith gives in to his desires; Jamie meets Sandra; and Amy discovers the existence of the cat women in a most painful way.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 4.17
anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
great story,there are some spelling errors.i'd like to see sandra or one of the other girls grow taller from the milk,and become an aggressor.
IamwhoIam
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
well written i enjoyed the first three parts(you'll see this on all three reviews) really like the progression and conflict he had to open up as well as the pride explanation, made it feel more natural. You need to continue this!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I'mma let you finish, but I'd just like to say the abrupt morality switch he had from not being ok with sleeping with Grace and Hope to just having a fuck fest between them overnight was just that, a bit abrupt. Aside from that, I'm not really complaining and look forward to your next installment. Your grammar is off, but you've put all 3 stories out so quickly its mostly expected.
Nightwing24
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I'm very much enjoying your story, with little to no complaints.
Only a minor mispell are and there.
Other than that, It's A-Grade (to me)
Please continue writing
R@gnaroCker
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Just read the whole story before commenting here. I know this story ain't finished either. There's that Jamie, and Amy's two (female) cats. Damn, that guy's is already busy.
Your grammar and spelling needs work. Really, you should proof read more. I can tell you're popping these out too fast to be proper. Name's even get switched. Remember, it's "bowl", not bowel.
Gee, by the time Turston catches up to what's happening, there'll be enough cat claws to tear them to shreds. And really, he should be outta money by now. Here's an idea. Have them start their own strip club. "Kit Kat," puuurrrhaps?
ryan111
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This story is improving as fast as the women in it! I think I only saw one spelling/grammar issue in the entire thing! Plus the story is snowballing into a pretty amazing one, sure to be remembered.
One thing I would suggest, I'm a big nipple/areola guy, and while they get mentioned every now and again, its pretty vague. The one time you sized them up was in chapter 2 where you said sandras were almost half a foot in diameter (which is pretty amazingly huge!) I'm really curious to how big the other girls are as well! (although i'm subbing my own measurements in the meantime, so it's just a suggestion)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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