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Keith Sheers was a cat guy; that is he was a single man who kept a cat to take care of his loneliness. But, one day a chemical accident changed the two forever. Now Keith must deal with a hot and horny cat woman living with him. (I was going to write the whole thing before putting it here, but realized that this is going to end up being a long one. Enjoy!!!)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 3.88
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.50
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
i enjoyed this story, and look forward to reading more.
nm
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Good start, Can't wait to see more.
IamwhoIam
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
well written i enjoyed the first three parts(you'll see this on all three reviews) really like the progression and conflict he had to open up as well as the pride explanation, made it feel more natural. You need to continue this!
ned oldfashio
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Another masterwork!(I also enjoied the elfworld saga a lot)
can't wait for the second part!
Vjames
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I liked this story extremely well. Good work, please do more
Bahamad
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
First, I like the overall concept of the story. As has been said elsewhere, it seems to be a bit cliched, but it feels like it can fit into the story being presented.
Parts of the story feel like you are really showing us how things are progressing, while others feel like you are simply telling us what is happening. When Keith reaches down to pet the cat, she reaches up to extend the contact and the piece is easy to visualize. This is what I think is a good example of what you can do for other parts of the story as the tale develops.
I also agree the retention of the flexibility is interesting and am interested in seeing how things progress with the main character and the supporting cast, which leads me to the thing I thought of most as I started reading the piece.
The introduction of the characters feels very jumbled. Amy is referenced before being introduced, Jamie is described physically with very little characterization while still being an acting character, and Keith's character seems to contradict with his actions and decisions. Keith is initially depicted as a very meek and depressed individual whose sole source of affection is his pet. He seems particularly afraid of losing this creature, yet brings her freely to his workplace and leaves her unattended without any sort of harness or identification in place. The scenario just did not feel natural.
All that being said, please continue your development of the story as I think the groundwork is in place for a good story while improving on your writing.
ryan111
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very slow to start, first few expansions have a LOT of teasing inbetween them. Once it picks up pace it gets really good, Interesting with the catgirl retaining many feline aspects such as flexibility. A few suggestions I would give is more breast detail, what are her nipples and areolae like? You say she has a long tongue, but is it still a course cat tongue? Also did any DNA transfer back to Keith? was Jamie affected in a similar way at all? Looking forward to a part 2!
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Times call for a little constructive criticism once in a while. While I personally enjoyed the story and certainly wouldn't mind if I suddenly had a hot cat women of a girlfriend, it still all feels a little generic or cliche. That said, I look forward to part 2.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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