A mysterious leak in the ceiling marks the beginning of a highly contageous infection that transforms men and women into air-headed nymphomaniacs.
Ah, the Bimbo plague, always one of my most treasured plot devices. But yes, the writing places some limitations on the excitement. The pace of the transformations limits the erotic potential. More detail on breast-growth and less off-scene transformations would be helpful. I think it would work much better in terms of eroticism if people could screw the contagious bimbos into a toe-curling climax for many hours, after which they pass out in orgasmic bliss, and then perhaps wake up as Bimbos themselves, or in the process of transforming. That would allow intense sex scenes, yet still spread the nymphomania far and wide. Something to think about.
Excellent work my friend - one of my favourites :-)
Awesome! Please continue!
Didn't really like it much. Far too much "off scene", far too many scene transitions... not enough of a real plot to speak of. Oh, and a 15 year old turning in to an 18 year old? Sorry, but... she's still 15.
I did not rate this in the 5s only because it simply wasn't my cup of tea and nothing really 'popped' out to me. That being said, it was well written, interesting concept and an entertaining read. I look forward to more.
I liked it. I like the concept and hope you go back to the stone at the end. I would love to know what that is all about. At times I got confused with the cutting back and forth between locations/characters. Maybe next time focus on one or two players that encounter all the others? But all of those are just minor points. Over all I really liked it. MOAR PLEASE!!!!
A well written story but it felt like it had flat characters and little description of transformation (mostly offscreen)seeing,hearing and feeling the events would make for a better story.
This story is an excellent reason why the database needs a horror tag.
Excellent. Just because it's dark and spreading, doesn't mean it's poorly designed. This is a classic camp style movie turned into erotica. Great work!
Best Story yet.
Pretty good. Too bad the sex scenes aren't very long since all of the guys transform almost instantly. There were a few minor spelling issues or typos, but overall, pretty good. Thanks for writing.
I agree with almost everything Very Good Karma had to say. I really enjoyed the full body transformations though by about halfway through the story they seemed to get a bit repetitive. Would have liked to see some of them with more detail and depth to their changes. Also they all seemed to happen at about the same speed; would have been interesting to see some of the infected taking longer to change based on the degree to which they contacted the virus. I am a fan of mental transformations and bimboization is fun to a point, but I agree that the story had kinda a downer ending as all characters completely lose all faculties.
Would be interested in seeing how you'd handle a sequel, maybe a partial cure gets people's minds partially back? Or a vaccine is developed that stops some, but not all, of the effects?
Overall though it was well written, just like 28 Days/Weeks later was well written though they too are pretty downer. I know not all stories have to have happy endings, just saying that's what I personally enjoy seeing.
Good stuff, just hope that if there's a sequel that there'll be a greater emphasis on the transformations. Perhaps less overall TFs but more detailed ones?
Well written, but definitely not my cup of tea. I like transgender transformations, and I sometimes like bimbo stories, but this goes beyond bimbo, past identity death, past mindless subhumanity, all the way into worldwide apocalypse and the extinction of mankind. I always remember the bit in 28 Days Later where the army guy points out that all the infected are going to just starve to death in six months, and that was the thought I finished on here. For me, bimbo stories work best when either the bimbo used to be someone nasty and they are now far nicer to everyone around them, or when the person who becomes the bimbo escapes a life of tension and frustration and goes on to just be relaxed and happy and have fun all the time. The death of human civilization and the erasure of all history kind of throws a wet blanket over the sex scenes.
As far as the transformations, they were generally very good. I very much liked the fully-described, total-body changes, as opposed to fixation on the breasts, and the description of these changes from interesting perspectives and with dramatic timing, like Mia's hips popping wider as she reached around under her leg, or several moments when breasts became apparent on men. I also liked the clever reveals of offstage-transformed characters. The high proportion of offstage transformations was disappointing, though, and much of the time it felt like what would have been the best parts were getting skipped- there was a lot of tension built up before Daniel's transformation, and then it never got shown.
Again, Daniel's brain being too scrambled for him to appreciate what had happened to him took the oomph out of the transformation. One of the best parts of the story, with the most pathos, was when Mia began to gather her wits at the club, and took aggressive action to try and satisfy herself. Bimbo does not mean passive, or utterly mindless. There is definitely such a thing as too dumb, and I find that a Bimbo is much much more sympathetic as a character when she's genuinely *trying* to think and control- or at least direct- her desires, and not just a sex-ATM.
Ultimately, with its sinister build up of tension, mysterious antagonist, grim consequences for promiscuity, danger of being separated from others, off-stage elimination of characters, and dark ending, this story felt more like classic horror than erotica.
Impressive - for tg fans, one of the best stories out there
Great, you should write more stories like this. It was very enjoyable...