Fundamental Mormon missionaries help Katie find happiness.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.22
- BE: 3.78
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 5.00
Maser-Brain
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
ScramblerJ
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
A nice addition to your growing number of tales. I was smiling at all of the Elders names.
-J-
Coffee Pilot
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I concur with previous posts. Good story concept, well written technically. Just needed a little fleshing out (pardon the pun) of the BE details.
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I agree w/ Alex. You need more description of the breast growth. That is no complaint, just a personal observation. I liked the story, keep up the good work!
alex
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I liked it a lot but i have only one qualm with the story. instead of solely saying cup sizes(which are impossible to imagine after E) can you try and describe where they reach. like if they reach her navel or something like that? i guess if you have to you should compare them to the usual fruits or sports equipment as well.
Mehta
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
It's not misogyny, it's fantasy. Absolutely nothing wrong with transforming fictional women into huge-breasted, wasp-waisted bimbos. Ghost does it better than most.
Unfortunately lacking in BE description, though.
John09
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
It was very well written, but I wasn't particularly a fan of the misogyny. I find an intelligent woman far sexier.
Big BEan
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very impressed. Nice work!
Ras
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great one, love your writing!
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