The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

The Date
After taking a girl home after a date, a guy finds his enormous penis has a willing - and growing - partner to play with.

This is my first attempt at a BE story - all comments welcome!
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

You did really great for your first time. I particularly like how you portrayed a guy as a caring partner instead of a misogynistic ass. Great story which left me wanting more.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Wow a great read. No paragraph issue(I use a mac). This is one of the better stories that have been uploaded here the past few months. Write on my man, write on.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

It has paragraphs. They're just done using Mac/Unix line endings.

If you open this in windows notepad, it will show as a giant block of text. You need to use a text editor that is smart enough to understand multiple text file styles. I like notepad++, but there are lots of options.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

As with most posters, the huge wall of text is a major issue. I would like to say, however that the story is terrific, well described, and well written. I would read more.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

No Paragraphs....Just a sloid block of text. Not even going to try to read it!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I'm not sure what you're going on about with paragraphs. I saw plenty of them. Nice story.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Good story, not enough size stories.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

Good read, except it was a giant wall of text. If you separated it out into paragraphs, it'd be easier to read for sure.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Very nice first story. Thanks for the read!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3


Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Paragraphs. Other than that well written.

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