Uncle Hank's immensely insulting graduation gift consisted of three gorgeous women tasked with finding Sidney a real live girlfriend. The Wing Girls guarantee success, but face it. Sidney's a trainwreck. He's going to need help. A megafuckton of it.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.62
- BE: 4.46
- Characters: 4.62
- Technical: 4.69
Johnny
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent!!! Looking forward to the next story.
RapierStab
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
It did get a bit tough to follow at points, but overall the story was very, very good. Well done.
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Your stories are usually fairly readable and entertaining, but this was next to impossible to follow much less enjoy.
BB47
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent Job, Bill. I agree with ktc, mc done well is so much better than nc.. and you've got the knack.
My only request is for you to spend more time being explicit. As far as I'm concerned, with this type of fantasy, the more details, the better. Fill in all the blanks and don't worry about slowing down to do it.. it's just that much better.
Above Ground Pool Prices
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Scribbler, give me a student's record-book!)))
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A masterwork. Thank you for writing, and sharing it.
If I had to give anything to improve, I would agree with the_fedora that sometimes it wasn't clear how big a woman's breasts were. Also, with the hair color, name, and relationship changes, towards the end of the club scenes it is a little difficult to figure out who is who and what they look like.
the_fedora
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Mr. Pratt, you are one of the best.
The changing perspectives (as always) were fun and charming. Having the control flip flop between Sid and Kari was very funny and sexy. No one can write a slut transformation hotter than you.
While many a bust were inflated, some to quite mammoth degree, i'm gonna knock you one point on BE. You will describe them as large and perhaps unwieldy but be vague on dimensions. I understand wanting to stay away from the cliched fruit and sporting goods but I like a comparable reference.
Regardless, this is one of my current favorites which I revisit frequently. Can't wait for your next masterpiece.
Mopey
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Mr. Pratt, you have done it again. Absolutely the best. All your works are good, cerebral and visceral at the same time. Your protagonists are like-able everygeeks, and the women all eventually enjoy what they become. Mind control is like that. You are an excellent custodian of the Master PC storymeme. Congrats.
Baen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Pratt, you're the fucking man.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Hark, my other weakness, Master PC stories!
Really though, your BE I did feel was weak (in that it just happening was kind of meh) but within the master pc world is pretty typical. While for some reason I can't stand nc, mc for some reason doesn't bother me. Maybe its because mc still remains mostly in the realm of fantasy compared to nc, which is unpleasant thoughts irl. Take my gradings with a grain of salt, the story was miles above lots of the bad that is posted here and look forward to your next installment
Heyo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Desperately hoping for a continuation!
some guy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A masterpiece, as always.
Infamy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Another amazing William Pratt story
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