The Overflowing Bra

Very enjoyable for such a simple story. There's one fault worth mentioning: "on crack" really isn't funny in a lighthearted pregnancy context. *grins darkly* I also felt the part where Alison woke up was too silly to be funny, but I'd say that about about a lot of stories. It's probably because of the difference between US and British humour, but also I don't want that much pointless explanation right at the point where the arousal is starting.

Spend more time on the descriptions of things; try to draw the important things out a little more. I liked the humor in the beginning, and I'd love to see more. I'd also like to see where the original story came from. I can't seem to track it down. 

Alright, again with the rape. Putting that aside, you did write a fairly nice description of the female lead, and this time around the story did not feel as sloshed around as in your blob one. The worm eating some celery felt tacked on and unneeded, and the mental image of a giant worm forcing itself onto a women is, again, not a pretty picture for me. 

It was interesting and nicely written, but the description could be better for the growth. Also, for future reference, try to put various versions of the story (like Notepad and Word) in the same folder. ^^; It's a little neater that way. :P

i like the slimeworms as her lover,but you didn,t say what size the worms were.earth worm is vary small,but an alien worm could be five feet long.getting screwed by a five foot worm,is a must read storie for a sick mind like myself.i,m a size freak.

Didn't enjoy it that much, but at least you found the spell-checker, didn't involve children, and used English syntax.