Nude sunbathing...with protoplasm.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 2.00
- Technical: 2.75
DHos
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Very interesting. I would like to see this go on. I've never heard of the body getting larger and smaller at a fast rate like that. That should definitely be expanded on.
Russian Judge
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
And again, you posted in Open Office format. You could port it to RTF or PDF format so that people could actually read it. C'mon, this is basic craftsmanship.
Stephan Royal
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Good writing once you got into the story. The back-story for the blob was rather grim, and detached. The BE was one or two sentences? Definitely need more of that if your going to post here, this is "The Definitive BE Story Archive" after all! :)
Aside from that your writing style is good and clean, just need more of a BE process, this was basically a vore story without killing the person.
ktc
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Your introduction felt like it could have been really good, instead it was a jumbled mess of what felt like a very convoluted story. When you get to the sex of the story, your quality goes up pretty dramatically. The Alice character was very weak in my opinion, and the blob while funny was also very creepy. There wasn't much description of BE, and this being a BE site is disappointing. Your bee story made up for the lack of BE with a stronger character and overall stronger plot. This felt rushed, and I think that's the biggest problem on it.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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