A big (and growing) student athlete finds a petite girl who becomes his wife. Through his own changes, she benefits as well....
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.89
- BE: 1.78
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.67
Anon
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Echoing other comments. Well-done, but the story was lacking what this site's actually about.
Daiyuki
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Story about a guy with huge feet gaining more and more weight. On a site about growing tits. Anyone see the problem here?
GeoffK
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
This is a good story and I enjoyed it, but it feels truncated. Just as the setup was in place and I was ready for the payoff, everything was wrapped up in basically a paragraph or so. That should have been many pages of description, exposition and explanation instead. BE weight gain, PE and all of the changes get short shrift from being squeezed into a sentence or two.
I'd like to see the author go back to this, revise and expand the last page into a full part two, as long or longer than the setup part of the story.
Technically, the writing, spelling, etc is fine and the descriptions, such as they are, are mostly ok.
Kara
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I am a friend of the author, and he was apprehensive about posting this story on this site. I urged him to post it here for the same reason that the last "Anon" comment brought up - this is the best site around for PE. I think it's a very well written story and belongs here, I hope he continues to post in the future.
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoy BE, and this is the site for it... but I also think that overflowingbra.com is the best site for reading PE, particularly for straight couples.
Very well written, but I would like to see it expanded with more of the breast growth description that other critics crave, and more description of PE for fans like me.
Over all extremely promising!
Jobber
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Above average writing. But I don't think this is the right website for this story. There's only the tiniest mention of anything breast related.
It's 99% focused on the size of the guy's feet. If you posted it on a site called "The Overflowing Shoe" then you'd be very popular, but it completely doesn't fit in here.
Anon
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Well written, significantly better than recent contributions to here. Not a bad one but yes overall lacking in BE but still a good read.
football
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
more sex! more growth! less career!
Helena
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The BE here is basically an afterthought, but I still enjoyed it immensely. Really. Thank you.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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