fantomeinfernal@yahoo.com
And what if you were able to invent an "immortality" serum?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.63
- BE: 3.63
- Characters: 3.56
- Technical: 3.63
anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
hope to see a sequel soon to this fantastic story.
Holland
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Wait, I cnaont fathom it being so straightforward.
Cf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Deleter
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Need to delete this one since he reup'd it.
AA
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
it was really good but file was hidden for some reason
Megamelonomaniac
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great story! Download worked OK for me too. Can't wait for the next installment.
PeterBE
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Good fun, a nice start.
The physical changes need far more description.
Suggest you recruit a native English speaker to edit before release.
Looking forward to chapter two!
Archive opens as empty on Windows 7 native zip decoder, but file is present in WinRAR and on Mac OS X. Suggest you re-upload using a different encoder.
dfbfdb
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
ican
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Jobber
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Great plot. Really entertaining story. My only nitpick is that your grammar and writing style could use some polishing.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome story, download was fine. Just as a note you may want to convert it to a more universal document, pdf or rtf comes to mind, but most people can open .docs so all is well.
Dr_know
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Truly a fantastic tale!
A wonderful job on the attention to detail in this story.
No doubt the sequel to this is going to be a highly anticipated release!
Possibly the best BE Story I have read all year!
-Dr_know
BE Vampirate
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Absolutely excellent!
Your description of the scientific process was perfect.
A great attention to detail without getting buried in it.
Very much looking forward to the next chapter.
painis
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Its not his fault you can't download it, you stupid twat. Back to the story I enjoyed it
cant download
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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