The Overflowing Bra

Very true! Makes a change to see sonemoe spell it out like that. :)

I am always willing to give any story a try, despite poor reviews, because you never know.
Well, I'm not going to go on about the English spelling and grammar, because other raters have already covered that. What I tried to do was imagine the story as it might have been in its native language (whatever that may have been), and I still can't make any sense out of the plot, or the characters, or anything. Any story needs elements of character and plot. Work on those before you even start the story.

Did not like it at all

An unfortunate attempt at something, that needs to be removed from your website.

Please do not feed the trolls.

To someone how want read this?!?! What are you trying to say? The story is as hard to understand...

Fucking annoying!!!

It's too bad there isn't a score lower than one. I still have no idea what i read. The closest thing to this that i have ever read was a set of poorly translated instructions for a bookcase that left you with 15 extra screws and 3 boards missing. It did make a nice bonfire though. The next time you get the urge to write a story, do us all a favor, get someone else to do it.

Shit be unreadable, yo.

I knew I should not have clicked on this story when there were errors on the front page, but sadly I did and felt the urge to comment. To the writer, this story was more like a rough draft of a brainstorming session to write a story that was straight translated on babelfish into english. It was unreadable and with no context.please find an editor with english as a first language

This is unreadable. Your English is extremely poor. Please find an editor.

I don't suppose we can interest you in the various pain fetishes?  Or are you already into them and trying to spread the joy?  Because one more like this and that's pretty much the only explanation we're going to have left.
Which does mean I'm expecting another one like this.  (Normally I'd throw in an "only worse", but I'm not sure how much deeper this can dig.)

There is a D in 'and', there is an E in 'some', there is only one L in 'lately', there are two Ls in 'will'.
Please learn English yourself before you go insulting other people, otherwise you're just a hypocrite.

Seriously!!! One would think that there were a competition on this site for the worst grammar ever written by a human being. Go back to school an learn som real English. If not, don't ever think about posting your crap here again. 
Sorry. I am just so damned irritated by the recent string of incredibly badly written stories on this site latelly. I am sorry for letting it all out on you. But for goodness sake, at least buy yourself a good dictionary. And start reading books in English. The more you read, the better you wil write. 

your english is terrible.use a word processor or something.jeez!