The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Hedi and Iva (with rtf)
(Included a rich text version, please remove previous upload.) Another Moment in Time, this time with a pair of long time friends who have an expanding time shopping for a dress...
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Quick vignettes don't allow for much character development or plot, but I rather enjoyed this BE sketch.

Could have been worse
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

I think you can do better. You need som better flow in your writing, and the descriptions could be better. A little more details, and character descriptions, please. You don't give the readers a chance to emotionally connect with the character. It just becomes too one dimensional.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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