Molly is about to turn 20. But instead of being excited she is torn up by her insecurity about her boyish frame. She seeks help and an unconcsious trigger is planted by a strange mistress at a store called 'Seek & Hyde'.
Molly will certainly not be small for much longer.
The first story of what possibly could be a 'Seek & Hyde' series.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.83
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.33
Stoker
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
The writing and language needs work, and some moderation in breast size might not hurt, but that's really just a personal preference... The characters and situations were a bit cliched, and I get the sense that the writer is rather young and finds 20 year oldes a bit more adult than I do... Despite this I did enjoy the story and won't hesitate to read the next one you write, but I would advise some more polish next time.
Raleigh
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This definitely has series potential. I'd love to see more!
idontknow
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great, hope you continue this!
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice one, although I don't quite get the last line...she must've had an AT & T phone or something...
Professor
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story. My only gripe with it is the occasional and very *VERY* minor grammar/spelling issues.
Chuckles
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved it! It was a refreshingly fun story with good descriptions of charecter personalities. A fun ending too. It sort of reminded me of the 1950's ending of The Blob. Lol
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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