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The Overflowing Bra

Yashmen Halfcount
Quantum of Solicitude
The misadventures of Alice Martini and her purple latex spy suit, the first chapter of a BE spy novel.   
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Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

...I have absolutely no idea what I just read. Not even the beginnings of a clue. Your story was jumbled, nearly incoherent and thoroughly confusing.

Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 4

Am I supposed to know some background on this? I got that she was a spy and her family left her, the stripper killed her with her heels, in a cardboard box (somehow). She was recruited and sent on a bunch of crazy missions with weapons that need you to be calm to work, which is an interesting idea. But where the fuck did the food come into all of this? Technically speaking, its great, but I'm left with a very shallow glimpse of this whole world you're trying to build. I hardly know the characters, except she was a great mom in a shit marriage. And how is there going to be a sequel if she activated some kind of bimbo gas bomb in her mouth, unless that's the end of her, which is disappointing because I have practically no understanding of this character. I like the imagined (?) sequences, yes, and the transformations are great for the most part, but I have no frame for anything, the world is jumbled and totally unexplained. Maybe I just don't appreciate your style, but I do enjoy the most plot developed stories the most, and there's... fuck I'm rambling and ranting, I just had to write this.

Mr. GreyMan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Another great Yashmen Halfcount story.

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