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This story is about a polite housewife that accidentally finds the Jinn of the lamp, and then, more or accidentally, takes over the world.
I know I should proofread this one or two more times, but I just can't help myself. Low impulse control.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.10
- Characters: 3.90
- Technical: 3.20
Moonraker
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I really enjoyed the scenario and the -compared to many other "goddess" stories- rather believable change in personality. It is also kind of well written, if there just weren't so many spelling errors and wrong words. The BE part also is kind of small in the story but otherwise it indeed is a nice read.
Dan Standing
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
I enjoyed this. Great idea, I appreciated that there was no Reset button at the end.
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
unusual theme. i really enjoyed it, though. the transition from bashful to domineering was very enjoyable to watch.
Mr. GreyMan
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 1
Well, she was a nice girl, but her husband was an ambitious greedy bastard, to stereotype successful banking lawyers. She only went postal after she drained him of "everything he had going for him." That was what I was going for. I guess I did not make it clear :/ Ah well.
Sincerely,
Mr. GreyMan
Roid Abuser
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
For a self-described nice lady, she sure did get off by draining people, which they hated. Didn't get the hatred of her husband who seemed like a normal, nice, gu.
buddyu
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
liked overall but it could have had more and better be.
PsyBomb
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
As mentioned it was a bit light on the direct BE. I normally like the "stolen attributes" thing in stories (wish it was a tag, to be honest), but the main character here just seemed to be a serious bitch about it. Even after she had compassion with the genie, she stole and stole and stole everything about people who you took pains to describe as horrified about it. Eh, guess it was just a bit much for me.
Grayface
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
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Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Sobtac
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Quite enjoyed it. Light on the B.E. but great, fantastic on the everything else
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