Part 1: The Girls of District D.
In the 23rd century, four girls have decided to use genetic breast enhancement to improve their figures, much to the delight - and distraction - of their friend Mike. Then, a professor from their university makes an offer that sounds too good to be true.
Not much growth in this part yet, only some imagined and virtual, but that situation will change in the next part, you can be sure of that!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.93
- BE: 3.64
- Characters: 4.86
- Technical: 4.86
Bb47
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
lkljl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
carl sagan you're awesome gif
Au.
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A paragon for everyone posting on this site.
Good BE in a better story, ambientated in an ever better world.
FSa
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Jason G
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
As other have said- well written and worth reading. Stick to your master plan for this arc you have going and it will make an excellent story. Thanks for sharing with us!
BE enthusiasts
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nice story with good character development and plot. Looking forward to next chapter
es3ban
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great work! I wait breathlessly (breastlessly? :( ) for the next installment.
anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Aha, very well done, although your 'genki girl' does feel a little too stereotypical.
Jandrys
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good story. I liked the various characters and how the plotline has been laid out. I am curious to see if certain sections are foreshadowing what is to come! I am really looking forward to the next installment. Good job!
Vlad
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It is a very refreshing change of pace to read a BE story that actually has a good story. I would love to see much more of this...
Moptop
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great, can't wait for the next installment.
PennyDreadful
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Outstanding! Light but somehow still ominous build up. From a technical standpoint, a very welcome breath of fresh air. Fanservice is always nice, but don't be afraid to keep it slow and keep the arc you're developing coherent. Thank you and look forward to the next installment.
Kailia
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed that, even if its only a preamble to what appears to be a much longer story. The setting and characters had enough life to draw me in and care about the outcome, a rare feat. Bravo, Dilandau.
Grayface
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed your story, and hope to read more with lots of BE.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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