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The Overflowing Bra

Quadhouse
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The Keeper part 6
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Clownface
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

You could use some proofreading because your grammar is indeed a bit lacking. But after finding it by coincedence after such a long time I truly hope for more stories of this series.

Clownboat
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Can't wait for the next installment in another five years. Grammar could also use some work, but either way, I found the story very enjoyable. I just wish there was more description of Sharon's actual BE.

Glenn
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

A nice installment to a good series. Grammar is a bit lacking. Just watch out when using the words 'were' and 'where' and be careful about tense agreement. Sometimes the verbs would shift to preset tense. Ignoring the grammar, the plot is fairly in-depth for a BE and quite engaging. You're just a tease ending it on a cliff-hanger, hm? I'm looking forward to [spoiler] learning why Robert is enhancing a strip joint, other than the obvious of spreading the big breasted wealth around. Keep up the good work.

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