Alex suddenly finds himself changing the women around him. Or is he? Illustrated. This is my first story.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 4.67
AShadowReborn
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The best story I have read on this site. I cannot wait for the second part.
Sonic1991
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This is by far one of the best stories I have read to date. Your storytelling is fantastic and the advancing of the plot is very enjoyable. I especially enjoyed the scene where Alex was struggling to keep his memories straight.
As for the BE, job well done. Your artwork only added to your great descriptions.
I cannot wait to see the follow up to this. I really hope you decide to write more of this story. Keep up the good work.
Maguffle
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
The fact that (at times) I forgot this was a BE story is a testament to your writing prowess. Job well done! I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Raleigh
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best stories I've read on here in a while. I can't wait for part 2!
ungnome
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome story, but I'm kinda getting sick of the crazy occult society that controls the world sub-plot.
ddbldlvr
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
darn good story, keep up the good work. looking forward to the next installment.
Wow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Brilliant, one of the best written pieces on this site.
Sometimes you almost forget it is an BE story (which is positive in my book) because of the higher quality of the writing. Hope you'll write more soon.
NJ89
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Other than an occasional homophone or typo this is a really, really good story. The pictures were a nice surprise (I got into it and almost forgot it was illustrated). Keep it up and I can't wait to continue reading your work.
a
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A few technical errors, but otherwise it was very good, however your BE should be a little more common and detailed (my opinion). Nice work, I hope you write more!
(Be sure to check out pg. 44 everyone!)
Chaos Maaster
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Please continue to write more chapters of this story! I would love it if the "agents" got some major payback when the heros/heroines? find out about their part in seperating Ira from Jess. Maybe Alex's powers is great enough to change males bodies too? PLEASE keep up the good work, I also agree with Glenn about your pictures. Your efforts to date look pretty good to me, especially the lines denoting the breasts movement, cannot wait to see how great they will look after some more practice!
Glenn
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'll echo DrKnow's sentiments in saying that this was a very well-written story. I enjoyed the reversal of the plot device of BE awareness from only the changer to everyone but the changer. It made the story feel fresher. Grammar, flow and spelling were consistently good. (The biggest error I could find was writing 'deficiently' instead of 'definitely' on the top of page 17, which is fairly trivial.) As for the illustrations, some were better than others. I'm sure that with enough practice they will eventually match the level of your prose. I'm looking forward to your next piece.
DrKnow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A very well written story! I enjoyed this story very much sir, the only thing lacking was a little bit of description of the BE.
As far as other suggestions go, if you enjoy the idea of unaware BE, try switching it up so Alex is the only one who notices the changes or a different story with the same prospect.
Overall this story is the best BE story I have read since "The Time Machine"
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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