The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Pi-We
13.th of April
Haylie will find out that Sweets has some nice effect on her body 
Average Scores:

Kanodin
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This shows that we need minimal readability standards here.

Xero
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I'm just following suit...

bloody hell!
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I'm only giving 1 because I can't go lower!

Anon
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

What is this I don't even?

Tek
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Not even remotely readable. The fact that this story tries to rip off somebody else's story actually makes it worse, if that's possible.

Ugh
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Hey, at least you are uploading stories I suppose.

Problem is you can't even get the title right.

OmniTrixie
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Whatever we did to deserve this, I'm sure we're very sorry.

Requiem
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

The grammar and story-telling terrible, and yes, story from days of random...

Hieronimus Matsumoto
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This was just...just horrible. It was a pure nightmare to read this. I can live with the fact that the "cady making breasts bigger" idea is totally overused. But your sentence build is enough to drive a person into post traumatic stress disorder. It is painfully obvious that your native language is not English, and that you are wayyyy to young to even be writing this kind of stories. Come back and try again in some six or seven years. Maybe by then, your English has improved to the point that it is possible to read.

idontknow
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Sobtac is right, days of random by tekweapons, did you just coppy every line from the comic? SHEEEESH isnt this a coppyright infringment?!

besides, tek did it MUCH MUCH better!

bodiddly
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

it is simply not coherent, next to impossible to read

nipplesucker
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Don't use .wps use .doc or .rtf. I can't open this.

BB47
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Yet, a thousand more people will download this crap. Just watch.

Sobtac
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Sorry to do this, but really?
Isn't this 'Days of Random' by Tekweapons?

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

While it may not deserve this score, I can't open it using any method I've used to open other .WPS files. These files are often unreadable unless you have the specific program used to open them or the very newest *And expensive* version of Microsoft Office. Please re-upload them in a .txt, .rtf, or .HTML format please as well as any previous stories you may have uploaded in the .WPS format. You will get far better reviews.

Offroad
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Shesh, I thought you would have listened to some of the complaints from your other story before you uploaded another one... this mess is completely and utterly unreadable. Get someone to translate them for you.

Like this for example: "I make fun of all the fouls there stand around to horrified them all with my sunny shine tooth but only god now if I can run out of the cycle which treed me with his sweets?"
I can't for the life of me figure out what it even means.

Baconman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Dude, don't upload in .wps format.

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