hypermarvelfan@yahoo.com
This is a story I've come up with recently. Figure I'll post two to four pages up at a time and when it finishes I'll repost everything as a complete story.
A woman bound and determined to prove her equality in any means necessary sets out to make her name as a bounty hunter and seems to have done just that. However, after a few runins with foxes, she may find that to be more difficult than she originally believed.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 4.33
- Technical: 3.67
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Not enough story. The segment you gave us was too small.
Baconman
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I'm liking where this is going. You're really good at setting a scene, and giving character descriptions ample enough to generate a good mental image, but you've gotta pick it up on the BE description. I know that's probably gonna get better with each new chapter, of course. Oh, and just a few odd typos and wrong word forms here and there, nothing huge.
lazulichris
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
This is the beginning of a story. It has possibilities but is unfinished.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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