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The Overflowing Bra

Hemmy
fkoch7@yahoo.de
10.Steps to Bigger Brast
I have written this story because I like to try out only 252 words this story has, I hope you like my experiment of a really short story .......
Average Scores:

littleone
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Here have a few no humor

pieman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

What is this suppost to be? It's just a mess of crap, and here i thought shakespear was hard to understand.

Brast Sufferer
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I was expecting a story about brasts, but instead, I think it somehow involved boobs. People everywhere suffer from the affliction of brast. I'd appreciate it if you'd not take the subject lightly.

Kanodin
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

"I crap bigger than you." ... Keep practicing; you need it.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Go Away

Zeppoton
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

This is not very good at all. Perhaps writing in your native language would be better.

OccasionalReader
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Even five minutes of editing would help.

Clarissa
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Full of fail.

IronHammer
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Wow... I didn't know the authors of The Room were in the BE community! Excellent work of the so bad it's hell-airy-us. Now let's all ride the failroad!

Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

An epic for our times, I was blown away by the virtuosity of this story. A true masterpiece. I'd give it ten out of five if I could. The economy of language it shows! Not a wasted word, surpassing even what Hemingway was able to achieve in the realm of doing more with less.

isengard
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

just no

WayNo
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Aweful

Rollie
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

just...no.

馬鹿外人
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

e-mail suffix is yahoo.de

Non-native speakers: include a native language version of the story.

日本語を下さい。

Doggy
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

No one really now how old the girl is in the story she can be 10 or 30 maybe. so why every one has a problem with the story ? " do you now your one language " how could someone say this . The guy has made a test too see how manny people would read this .

Russian Judge
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

1. From what language was this translated? 2. Did the person who wrote this know his own language? 3. Was it a straight translation from that language, or were their intermediate translations, like from Swedish to Chinese to Portuguese to English? 4. What was the point of this minimalism, to see how little thought could be put into the story? 5. Has the author ever read any other BE stories, or any stories of any kind? 6. Did the author know the meanings of any of these words, even in his original language? 7. Has the author ever seen a photo of a woman's breast? 8. Has the author ever been close to a living woman's breasts? 9. Were drugs involved in the writing of this story? 10. Is the author actually, really proud of writing this story?

Akairos
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Experiment failed :(

-
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

What. The. Fuck.

Kensington
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

If only I could give zeros...

OmniTrixie
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I have to give you ones. The system isn't designed for anything lower.

Gorrid
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Just... no

Trolololo
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Maybe the worst i've ever read.

Littelone
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 1, Technical= 4

This is really short but good i like it only a few words but good words ..........

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