This is my first story about BE story so i was interested do it by my self ! it's maybe not the best but it's the first =)
Last a few years has been to Ibiza, so met a person there whose style of presentation is very similar to yours. But, unfortunately, that person is too far from the Internet!...
Not going to read a story which is not even two pages long and which is written in bold italics centred, ending with "should I write more".
This story is a complete waste of time and resources for everyone involved.
Epically bad.
One can only hope that your next herpes outbreak blinds you, preventing any more of this inane crap.
dear dude who can't write. please stop posting these.
.wps? Really? A format that NOBODY uses?
Apparently the story is even worse now? Reading the comments, I've no idea where these quotes come from, because there's just a retarded "10 steps" thing that has a badly-written line for each step.
omfg.....i can make a better story in this comment. watch ready. One day i was railing my girlfriend and i couldnt stop cumming and i made her breasts grow. that was more descriptive and better then this dudes "story"
Can't open the file where I can read it. Upload it a RTF or TXT file.
I finally downloaded it and got a file that my computer had no idea what to do with. When I finally read it, it was incomprehensible.
A bit early for an April Fool joke but still a good one.
MS-Works???????? Please tell me that this is an April Fools prank.
Epic Fail otherwise.
for awhile it just sat there in all it's out of reach no download link state, then a download link appeared, and brought up a file that my computer had no idea what to do with. When I did find a way to read it it was incomprehensible. I gave it a three because I enjoyed the chase of trying to find the tale far more than the tale itself. But don't lose hope, perhaps you will develop a deeper understanding of the language and be able to write in it, or perhaps not. Who knows really.
Good lord. I never thought I'd see the day where I would have to reject a story because it was UNNAMED.
I'll add a name so people have something to click on.
How do I download this story?
You can view the story in all its horrific glory by copying the download link for another story and replacing the ID number with 2380.
Favorite quote:
My samples Sonya watched Monica still in the process was all set aside .Monica turned to the side to raise a further ampoule. she touched with her finger the green liquid. "what is this so-slimy disgusting" she weights the fingers on her Pollover and put the others back into the ampoule box.
Suggestion: write in German, have someone edit it, then have someone translate into English. Then someone else edit again.
This is so bad it's good!
I couldn't resist making a few random comments:
"She found a nice little dress for her next dinner"
--is she a giant moth?
"Sonny started to say something but a sound out of the car cut her"
--it must have been a very sharp sound.
"Get out of the Fuck car Swetty"
--and take a shower?
"no without me I go back on may one"
--or perhaps on april thirty?
"one of her short shoulder long hair fall into her face"
--how long was it really?
"the things in there was fallen on the hard rock sand"
--is that like a hard rock band?
"My breasts are growing holy shit"
--she could get busted for that.
What. The. Fuck.
if 62 ppl has downloaded it when i cant find where to download it at
A promising start, but really needs to work on English language skills.
I now the writter of this story hes an XX years old XX from germany whif an good english but not for storys like this XD
Two huge suggestions. One, name your submission, I had to do some silly HTML trick to even download the thing. Two, reupload in .rtf or .txt, cause .wps isn't a well-used format around here.