This is a parody of the Dr. Suess story "Gertrude McFuzz" nearly word for word but breast expansion themed. This is Edgar's first attempt at BE.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.50
Mike
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I really enjoyed this style of writing that you used from Dr. Suess. You adapted it to BE quite well however as it got closer to the last two paragraphs you lost the touch just a little bit and it didn't "flow" like the rest of the story did. Other than that all you need to do is work on your grammar and spelling. Overall I would love to see you continue to write stories using this method.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Interesting idea, though proofreading is something to think about, considering that Lou's size changed throughout the story between C and D, among other things.
Can't really grade on writing and grammer 'cause it wasn't really yours to begin with.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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