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A new breast cancer cure has the happy little side effect of enlarging breasts. Now that the majority of women have been vaccinated (some more than once) the world is changing. This is the final chapter of a three part tale. If you'd like to read the first two parts go back and find 'An Ounce of Prevention' (pt. 1) and 'A Pound of Cure' (pt.2)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.13
- BE: 4.33
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.47
Ntando
Overall= 2, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
A fascinating dcisussion is definitely worth comment. I do think that you need to publish more on this topic, it may not be a taboo subject but typically people do not discuss such issues. To the next! Best wishes!!
new
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
horrible
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I would have rather read a story about Dean's plot to murder James and Olivia. Much of this story was disgusting.
Red
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Talented, and a real story with a real theme and artistic vision. And fabulous BE involvement, growth AND size, with the all-too-rare realistic effect of enormous, enormously heavy breasts. Off-the-scale good, I ding it as less than perfect only for the tg - skip that, and it's epic excellent. Thanks!
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Well done. A little dark in parts, but good overall.
John Krieger
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Great story and all, have to 1 ya to even out your own 5 vote! ><
Kowalski
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Thanks all for the thoughtful feedback. I sincerely appreciate it and find it useful. I agree the ending has a tacked on feel, particularly Dean's 'magical' restoration. As for James and Olivia, I struggled with that one myself (i.e. their motivations.) Dean definitely 'crossed her' in the past (on top of showing up for work in cum-stained clothing and leaving work all the time to home to service the wife). She just did not like the guy. And as manager of the gym he was probably responsible for firing James, who she did like. Other than that I guess that situation served to illustrate one of the many ways this 'wonder drug' could be dangerous/harmful when misused "in the wrong hands." I realize the whole thing went dark. In my view, though the world is a better place because of this drug, it also opens the door to a new kind of sex fueled dementia. And for certain husbands, an early death. But even amid all that (and taking into account Sarah's degenerating physical and mental state) I feel she had her little victories along the way, basically the generosity and admiration of others at times when she needed it.
Having said all that, I went into this story wanting to flesh out the Dean character, who in the first two parts was pretty much a cardboard cutout. So there was an investment in that part of the story; ultimately probably too much so.
Ginja Ninja
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Difficult to think of something that hasn't been said before so I'll just bring up the things I agree with that others have said. I really enjoyed the story, but was confused by the motives behind Olivia and James' stunt. I am glad there was a happy ending, even if it was almost a Deus Ex Machina-style ending. On a side note, this is the first time I've heard about people going to Thailand to become more masculine. Ha ha
Kanodin
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Ambitious and crowd-pleasing, to the point that your story scatters in several directions, challenging the limits of a unified story. Dean's feminization and the reversal did not match up because the cure happened offstage in Bankok. I am still confused about what motivated the James/Olivia conspiracy in the first place, since they inexplicably fell out of the story. Strange why you invested a lot there, just to throw them aside.
Overall, this episode has a distinct feeling of doom to the very end, particularly because of the protagonists' financial and physical troubles and an abundance of antagonists. Consider inserting interludes of genuine victory or success in between the misfortunes, as you did in your previous installments of this storyline. Going negative for long drags will fatigue the reader.
J
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed this, and was happy the feminization of the male lead was reversed, as I did not enjoy that development, at all. His return to studliness, while welcome, was a bit sudden and seemed "tacked on."
FWIW, as a technical note, steroids are not injected into the vein. Just a plain intermuscular injection like a flu shot. Any knowledgeable steroid users would avoid the side effects you listed with hCG (which keeps the testicals functioning when excess testosterone is present) and armidex (which prevents the conversion of test to estrogen -- the cause of gynomastia, or "bitch tits."
X
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Best series in a long time!
Ox
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best BE writers of all time, and with a happier ending (to me) than usual.
namrego
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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