A big guy, a small girl, then a big girl and a big guy, then an even bigger guy and a small girl.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.15
- BE: 3.08
- Characters: 3.62
- Technical: 4.31
Josephine
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Gaffenheimer
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
It's a sweet, innocent story of two lovers growing.
Stuff
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Enjoyed it. I'd like to see more.
pillager
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Anonymousss
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I am really really liking the concept and you did very well putting it into words. Please feel free to write a sequel or an expanded version. :)
Biznitz
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
The transformations were barely touched on, and they were extremely short. Not worth reading.
Moptop
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Great story, would love to see more. Also, a little bit more character development would be great.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed this story; I love mutual growth stories of this sort -- I mean it's no fun to make wild sex with a perfect woman, unless your body matches up.
I do agree it was too short and more detail could have gone into this.
Gingerbeardy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
To be honest, it felt like the story wasn't finished and it was like you got bored and stopped writing it halfway through, a proper ending would have made this a lot better
isengard
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The story is written well, but the guy's growth dominated the story. I would have loved to read more about his girlfriend and less of his own growth
Greener21
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
It's great, what there is of it, I would have to criticize the length and lack of description. Right now it looks like either an introduction page, or a short summary of a story. There really isn't enough there to call it a complete story by itself. If you expand it into something full length I think like to read it.
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
My personal tastes would have enjoyed more description of the breasts, but that's just me.
anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
AN interesting story.
One thing that I think your writing could use would be more dialogue and description. Matt even comments on this within the story, thinking that it's strange they weren't talking about the events.
For example, the second-to-last paragraph, which I'll avoid quoting here to skip spoilers, could be expanded into an entire scene; him waking up, talking about things with Julie, the actual actions described, etc etc etc.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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