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A young woman participates in a controversial medical study promising a cure for breast cancer and gets more than she bargained for.
This is the sequel to An Ounce of Prevention
It is helpful to read the first (shorter) story, but not necessary. This is the corrected final file and includes one image.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.89
- BE: 4.89
- Characters: 4.89
- Technical: 4.67
Coffee Pilot
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Excellent story. I second the comments of all those who have posted before me. As someone who is himself working on an ongoing story I have to admit that reading such excellent prose as this is a bit intimidating and makes me second guess my own ability a bit. That being said, although it does slow me down a bit it can only make me a better author in the end by having you set the bar so high and providing such excellent inspiration. Thanks and keep up the great work!
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
The story was very good. The technical aspects of it could use some clean-up. There are some typos and a lot of instances of unneeded commas. All that said, it was still readable, and I look forward to additional stories. :)
wtftit
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Another excellent story, can't wait until your next one.
Flyguy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
LOVED IT, I will gladly read any of your stories!
Red
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It just doesn't get any better than this. Something that was actually WRITTEN. Recognition and appropriate emphasis that when a girl has big breasts, they're heavy and they sag. Realistic human behavior, not at all shying away from both the randomness of real life and the hard-to-face unfortunate things that do happen. Discussion of a mother who died of breast cancer? What a true touch. Sarah's struggle with her blimplike breasts, both physically the trouble she has lugging all that titflesh around, and emotionally how she deals with the attention her topheaviness draws. Great, great story. One can only hope that the fabulous Kowalski will write Chapter Three, "A Ton of Trouble", where Sarah for some good reason of her own, takes a second dose of the vaccine and realistically balloons to truly enormous and actually disabling size. thanks again. And also thanks to the terrific comments above. Agree with them all!
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This story shows a marked improvement over your previous compositions. This improvement has nothing to do with technical aspects, such as readability, flow, grammar, spelling, and so on. This improvement exists in a behavioral and ideological realm. I am talking about how realistic sexuality and psychology is beginning to emerge.
I say that this transformation is beginning because you still include a throwback in the story. Hypnosis came easy in part one in this story, disrupting my enjoyment. I celebrated your removal of the hypnosis, but was equally disturbed by how easily the change occurred in both its appearance and disappearance. Mind control fetishes aside, hypnosis does NOT work the way depicted. Not even close. If you want MC, please find a different mechanism. PSAD is a good example.
In other news, you are also beginning to refine your form, paying less homage to description and irrelevant plot development, which tends to make stories drag and fail, especially during re-reads. This part two is certainly not your longest story or even your most sophisticated, but it is your best by virtue of your economy and management of the reader's desires and emotions.
Kudos to this newer Kowalski!
Jay
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I second everything written below.
Milom
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I can't believe I'm the only reviewer of this story. I hope the other ones got lost in the consolidation of the other 2 files.
I also can't really figure out how to write this review without coming off as absolutely fawning and gushing etc. So let me just say you are one of the legendary masters of this genre, and this story is further proof of your deft skill.
It is incredibly refreshing to see a story that isn't crammed full of shemales and women with dicks for eyes, that isn't dashed off in a text file over the space of 15 minutes with the never delivered promise of a sequel where the expansion is supposed to take place, and instead focuses on a flawless execution of hitting all the buttons of the fetish this website and the BEA were created to celebrate. And it does all this with writing that is so understated and subtle I would find it impossible to believe it didn't come from the keyboard of a proffessional writer.
I know you can't be doing this for the kudos. I know the vast chasm of silence in this comment section seems loud to me. But this story is perfect. Endeavors like this rarely come along, and I want you to know it is appreciated, and not just by me. Damn nice job.
PS - "But You Should Have Seen the One That Got Away" is probably the most depressing thing I've ever read, and back in like 2005 it knocked me flat for about 3 days. I've always been meaning to review that story and mention how horribly affecting it is.
Kowalski
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I had a heck of a time posting this file.
This should be the 100% OK GOOD final version.
MrHHH, please delete the other two if possible (along with this comment!?)
Thanks! —K
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