The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bobbie Bazooms
Number One Fan
This is the story of how I lost my wife.  But, she's a lot happier this way...
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Personally I love a well-written cuckold/humiliation story. The problem here is that we go immediately from the picture of her on the guy's desk to him living with Mexicans and her with enormous "real" tits doing vertical splits on a stripper pole. Everything that could have made this story great occurrs offstage, instantly. Where's the fun in that? It would have been better if Miranda had been slowly developing against her will while still living with the (anti)hero, growing larger, growing away from him, then one day leaving, only to later turn up on stage. Also, a slower change would have allowed for these characters to become more dimensional.

hated it
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

You see, I really wanted to see the husband grow some tits and kill the SOB dego. Too bad your story was unimaginative and boring. The BE was, well what BE? No thanks.

Poor Guy Needs to Grow Some Nuts
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

So, uh, yeah. Not that into the sub thing but for those who are this is a fun story. Very little if any BE.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Set aside character development, style, grammar and all of that for a moment.

I think that what it really comes down to, is that many of the readers here aren't that into the humiliation and cuckold aspects of this story. And this truly is a classic example of how those stories tend to be written. There is extra attention paid to having the narrator wallow in his own self pity and demean himself to the reader.

Some people really get off on it. I don't think a story should be knocked for having an additional fetish. We don't do that for giantess or ass growth included in stories. Why should we here?

Personally, cuckold turns me off. But I wouldn't just condemn a story for that one reason. There are plenty of other ways to judge a story.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

At this point in your writing career, it's pretty safe to say you don't do likable protagonists.

Or antagonists.

Background characters.

Anyone, really.

In Flayshun
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

Hated the characters, hated the premise and the BE was essentially nonexistant. This seems much more like a sub/dom fetish thing than anything to do with BE.

Also in future can we talk less about the guy's penis? Just saying there seemed to be alot of fixation on it... kind of a moodkill...

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I have not read your story and probably never will, but for the people who are commenting with 1-1-1-1 because of the file and not the context of the story need to really stop that.

5-5-5-5 to balance it out.

No Name for You, Worm!
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Dull, uninteresting, no investment in characters, story, plot, or growth (literally or figuratively)

There's nothing here. This should be skipped with extreme prejudice.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

From a BE standpoint, the growth really didn't seem to have much development. There was reason enough for it, but not so much in the way of process or demonstration of the growth beyond the introduction and reinforcement of the increased size.

From a character perspective, the story reads like someone who's given up on life. While this could be seen as a detriment, it really gives the author a perverted sense of focus. I don't know how often such a device should be used, but I feel it was used to a reasonable extent here where fate continues to beat on the author and repeatedly beat into his head what was lost.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

For those unable to open the file, how about the .doc version posted right before this, hmm? 8)

Bobbie Bazooms
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Is anyone able to read this?

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

.DOCX is not a very good format try .DOC and then I might be able to rate the story

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