The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

JR Parz
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Nick's friend gives him a perfume potion that turns his dream girl into a busty sex slave.
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 The Doctor
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
In a short story you have covered the necessary steps superbly! The reader is brought into the fantasy at just the right pace. It is an exciting read, keep up the good work!
 fragger
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3 
very good
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